When The Best Thing Happened to Me
By: Ian
I remember the day like it was yesterday. I was in second grade. I was having the worst day, and I got in trouble. Also I didn’t have enough money in my account to get lunch. And worst of all it was raining. As I was sitting in my classroom eagerly waiting for the day to go by, my teacher walked up to me and asked,
“Ian what’s the problem? You’re not doing any work, and you look sick.” She had said
“Well for one I don’t have a pencil and second of all I didn’t eat lunch because I didn’t have enough money in my account to eat.”
“Oh I’m sorry well here, if you promise to work hard here’s a pencil for you to use.”
“Thank you and I promise.”
As the afternoon carried on I went to the nurse and got me some crackers to eat and then finished my work, but the rain didn’t stop. Now it was storming. When I was a little kid I was horrified of storms and I didn’t want anyone to know. So I just sat there and tried to play it off, that didn’t work because I was so jumpy. Every time some one would walk by and say something to me I would jump right out of my seat.
My teacher walked over to me again and she asked,
“Ian now what’s wrong?”
“Oh nothing.” I responded with a horrified look on my face.
“Oh okay but anyways, it’s time to start reading, so get your book out.”
“I don’t have my book.”
“Ugh, Ian what am I going to do with you?” After that she walked off and I found a book so I started reading. The storm had died down so I wasn’t as nervous as I was before. Now the last class of the day. I thought. Finally I get to go home after this.
The last class was math so at least I was good at that. The teacher called on me to go up to the board and solve the problem. The problem was 3x2. Now being in second grade that was fairly challenging. So once I got up to the board of course I froze. Took me forever to finally remember how to do multiplication but I figured it out. The class was almost over now. So I was walking around the room and I tripped over my shoe lace and hit my head against the table. Boy that hurt really bad. The teacher asked,
“Ian, are you okay?”
“Yeah I guess my head hurts.”
“Will you be okay?”
“Yeah.”
So after that ordeal and that bad day that I had I started feeling sick again, like really sick. I went to the nurse and lied down for a while then went back to my class and sat down on my chair. The bell and rung but it seemed like for ever until she called walkers and car riders. So as I was walking out a bunch of people were running into me. Then I see my mom holding something. It had the figure like a dog but I wasn’t sure. So I went up to check out if it was a dog, and I turns out it was a dog. So I asked.
“Whose dog is that?” The reason why I asked that was my mom used to like watch dogs while there owners where gone.
My mom had said. “It’s ours!”
“OH MY GOSH YES!”
When I was a kid the only thing that I had really wanted was a dog, but y parents never let me get one. So I was so excited that all the years of begging and asking finally paid off. So after I had gotten into the car we went to Pet Smart and got her some food and a cage. That night when we were playing with her we needed to think of a name for her. We decided to name her Marley, after the famous musician Bob Marley. So 6 years later, Marley is as happy as can be and is living a good life. So from this event I learned that. When you are having the worst days, when you need something to cheer you up, and when there is nothing but a dog, only then will you find true friendship with a dog.
your story is really good. there's dialouge,a good title, and plot. the only thing that i noticed that you might want to improve on is your sentence structure- most of your sentences are either simple or compound. other than that it's great.
ReplyDeleteI like the fact that you were having very bad luck but then at the end of your story your new dog made it all better. It was a very fun to read.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I like the part about the dog.I think its really good how you have all of the dialogue in it and all the exdplaining you did.
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I really enjoyed reading this! The only issue in general is grammar, but thats easily fixed. Oh, and I like your blog nifty backround! Really good job on your story.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your story. It was fun to read. i enjoyed teh ending and I like how you had dialoge
ReplyDeleteit was really cool how you made the first part so long and you did a great job with the details! i saw one spelling error but other than that great job
ReplyDeletethat was really nice of your mother to get you your own dog. Good job with the details in your story. but you should make your story just a little bit longer, you need to add more events to your story.
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